CampFire With My Family
On the first day of the holidays, my family and I had a campfire as well as a little chit chat.
Most of the family came late so we had to start without them, as they arrived we all hid away from them like they went to the wrong spot but they didn't really expect us hiding away from them before they arrived, Then we all yelled. SURPRISE!!!. We all can't believe we scared some of our family that have never been scared before ever since our papa passed.
Afterward, my family and I went for a hike up the really humongous hill at the back of our property and it was on a dark scary night. BANG!! We all walked up the hill hearing loud bangs, it sounded like people shooting pigs, ducks, and even horses. As we walked up the scary, spooky hill we all wanted to have a race back to the campfire but we all got scared after hearing a loud scary.BANG!!! We all started to get a bit braver than how we were before. we walked up the hill our torches started to flicker and we thought it was still gonna go but then my uncle said.” Hey, my light is flickering what's going on with my torch?”. My aunty screamed like a little child, as she screamed we all got scared and started to hide behind our uncle. “Oh know I thought we were gonna have to walk home in the pitch-black forest”. So we all wanted to have a race back down the hill cause we got more scared just after we were feeling brave. Ok on your mark get set Go!!. Of we went sprinting down the hill as fast as we could and the first one there was me. But I felt sad for the rest of the kids so I let them have the week of jobs with me too.
Last but not least as all of my family left me and the kids went down by the eleing hole and went for a swim and it was like midnight and it was really scary cause we were the only ones there. After our swim, we all felt numb like a monster that was covered in ice so we all ran and put our warm cozy Pijays as we went to bed. We felt an enormous chill like we were stuck in a freezer, I looked around wondering what it was that gave me the enormous shiver.
Thanks For reading
What an eventful night with your family Fern! You added detail by including dialogue, thoughts and describing what you did and heard in the middle of your recount. At times I find the story hard to follow. Keep putting effort into your proof-reading to check you have given readers enough information and are using correct punctuation. You are a very capable young lady.
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